The biggest feedback that I took from the second elevator pitch was that I was told my elevator pitch was too vague and that people wanted to know more about the benefits of this service. Nothing that they said was wrong, but I didn't include the feedback of allowing for a monthly or yearly service fee because I want this to be a on-demand service that people turn to when they are in need.
In my third pitch, I wanted to focus on the benefits of my service which were that we are saving energy, going green, and also are pushing to living a healthier life by choosing to use my service. Also, I tried to be less vague by explaining that there are stations around the university that they can check bikes out from, pay with a card, and take the bike.
Hey Walter,
ReplyDeleteI liked the ending of the video when you described the benefits of your company. I think that’s something that many elevator pitches are missing. An advice I can give to you is to keep the pitch simple. You were explaining too many different aspects of the company, and I kind of got lost. My elevator pitch talks about the clothing store I want to open called Tailored. You can check it out at http://entrepreneurshipblogs.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
This is a great idea! I remember using Citibikes throughout manhattan and it was definitely a life saver. Sometimes walking is just not fast enough, so bikes would be beneficial. I really enjoy this idea as somebody who bikes and walks between classes. Good Luck!
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